SJ4: YA Psychological Thriller (#OwnVoices PoC) – Girl In Ruins

Title: Girl In Ruins

Category: Young Adult

Genre: Psychological Thriller (Own Voices PoC)

Word Count: 75,000

Pitch: Boy meets girl. Girl murders boy.

Accused of a murder she doesn’t remember committing, a seventeen-year-old ballerina’s freedom hinges on finding her boyfriend’s killer, before they find her.

Black Swan meets We Were Liars

First 250 words of manuscript:

LOS ANGELES POLICE DEPARTMENT’S 911 TRANSCRIPT LOG 

Date: January 1, 2015, 2:47 a.m.

Dispatcher: 911, what’s your emergency?

Female Caller: I did it.

(Heavy Panting)

Dispatcher: You did what, ma’am?

Female Caller: He’s not breathing—I’m going to leave him here (muffled) The house is on fire.

Dispatcher: I’m going to need you to calm down and tell me your location.

Female Caller: It’s my friend’s beach house in Paradise Cove… the glass mansion. Off North Avenue.

Dispatcher: Are you out of the house, ma’am?

Female Caller: I’m in the driveway.

Dispatcher (off-call reference): One of the Paradise Cove homes is on fire! There may be a person trapped inside.

Dispatcher (to caller): Are you still there, ma’am?

Female Caller: Yes! Are you sending someone?

Dispatcher: Help is on the way. Can you tell me more about the person not breathing? Are they still in the house?

Female Caller: (Whispering) Please don’t let him die.

Dispatcher: I’m trying to assist you with the proper resources, but I have to know, prior to the fire—was the person trapped inside the house hurt? Is that why they’re not breathing?

Female Caller: (Hysterical Crying)

Dispatcher: We need to gather more information to find you. What is your name?

Female Caller: Tell him that I’m sorry and… I love him.

Line goes dead.

PRESENT

The Pantages Theater’s stage lights are harsh, like a plastic surgeon’s knife, slicing through my body’s every

imperfection, while I dance center stage. My body wasn’t born to dance.

 

15 thoughts on “SJ4: YA Psychological Thriller (#OwnVoices PoC) – Girl In Ruins

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  2. I’d love to take a look at this! Let’s go to the Candy Castle!
    Please send Query + full manuscript attached as a word document to: rena (at) thedeborahharrisagency (dot) com

  3. Request to take the Candy Castle! Please send the query and the full manuscript (attached as a Word document) to queries [at] parkliterary [dot] com. Please paste the query into both the body of the email and the first page of the Word document. Put “Pete Knapp – Pitch Madness” in the subject line.

  4. Request to take the Cherry Pitfalls! Please send the query and the first 100 pages (attached as a Word document) to queries [at] parkliterary [dot] com. Please paste the query into both the body of the email and the first page of the Word document. Put “Blair Wilson – Pitch Madness” in the subject line.

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