Title: Girl In Ruins
Category: Young Adult
Genre: Psychological Thriller (Own Voices PoC)
Word Count: 75,000
Pitch: Boy meets girl. Girl murders boy.
Accused of a murder she doesn’t remember committing, a seventeen-year-old ballerina’s freedom hinges on finding her boyfriend’s killer, before they find her.
Black Swan meets We Were Liars
First 250 words of manuscript:
LOS ANGELES POLICE DEPARTMENT’S 911 TRANSCRIPT LOG
Date: January 1, 2015, 2:47 a.m.
Dispatcher: 911, what’s your emergency?
Female Caller: I did it.
Dispatcher: You did what, ma’am?
Female Caller: He’s not breathing—I’m going to leave him here (muffled) The house is on fire.
Dispatcher: I’m going to need you to calm down and tell me your location.
Female Caller: It’s my friend’s beach house in Paradise Cove… the glass mansion. Off North Avenue.
Dispatcher: Are you out of the house, ma’am?
Female Caller: I’m in the driveway.
Dispatcher (off-call reference): One of the Paradise Cove homes is on fire! There may be a person trapped inside.
Dispatcher (to caller): Are you still there, ma’am?
Female Caller: Yes! Are you sending someone?
Dispatcher: Help is on the way. Can you tell me more about the person not breathing? Are they still in the house?
Female Caller: (Whispering) Please don’t let him die.
Dispatcher: I’m trying to assist you with the proper resources, but I have to know, prior to the fire—was the person trapped inside the house hurt? Is that why they’re not breathing?
Female Caller: (Hysterical Crying)
Dispatcher: We need to gather more information to find you. What is your name?
Female Caller: Tell him that I’m sorry and… I love him.
Line goes dead.
The Pantages Theater’s stage lights are harsh, like a plastic surgeon’s knife, slicing through my body’s every
imperfection, while I dance center stage. My body wasn’t born to dance.